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The legalization of marijuana in Colorado.

The sale of marijuana in Colorado crossed the red line. From this month 1st, The sale of marijuana is legalized. As a result, there is a heated debate in the U.S. from the very new year. It’s the first case in the U.S. that licenced stores sell marijuana legally. 20 states in the U.S. are already allowed to sell marijuana for medical purposes.

This time, legalized marijuana is for recreation. General people can purchase marijuana for fun or hobby. 40 stores in Colorado started selling marijuana. To date, state authorities gave 348 retail licenses. Therefore, It is expected to increase more retailers.

Any residences whose age is more than 21 in Colorado can buy marijuana at most up to 1 ounce(28.3g). Residences in the other states have limitations to buy it up to one fourth ounce.

But it’s supposed to be smoked in only Colorado. It is barred to take marijuana to other states or Denver international airport. The legalization of marijuana is not the case only in Colorado.

Washington starts selling marijuana from the middle of this year. This 2 states approved of the sale of marijuana through referendum in November last year. Colorado built a lot of system not to flow into black market. Washington made system where only if you have license, you can cultivate and sell recreational marijuana. Marijuana is still illegal in federal law.

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The Legalization of Marijuana in Colorado.

The sale of marijuana in Colorado has crossed the red line. From the 1st of this month, the sale of marijuana has been legalized. As a result, there is a heated debate in the U.S. from the very beginning of the year. It’s the first case in the U.S. in which licenced stores sell marijuana legally. 20 states in the U.S. are already allowed to sell marijuana for medical purposes. This time, marijuana that has been legalized is for recreation. General people can purchase marijuana for fun or hobby. 40 stores in Colorado have started selling marijuana. To date, state authorities have given 348 retail licenses. Therefore, the number is expected to increase. Any residences whose age is more than 21 in Colorado can buy marijuana at most up to 1 ounce(28.3g). Residences in the other states have limitations to buy up to one fourth ounce. But it’s supposed to be smoked in only Colorado. It is barred to take marijuana to other states or Denver International Airport. The legalization of marijuana is not the case in only Colorado. Washington starts selling marijuana from the middle of this year. These 2 states approved of the sale of marijuana through a referendum in November last year. Colorado built a lot of systems to prevent it from flowing into black market. Washington made a system where only if you have license, you can cultivate and sell recreational marijuana. Marijuana is still illegal in federal law.

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